Wednesday, September 28, 2011

Writer's Platform Building Second Campaigner Challenge

The Writer's Platform Building Second Campaigner Challenge is here!  Here's my entry:   
         Imago Interrupted 


After two nose surgeries, liposuction, breast augmentation, and a barrage of beauty treatments, Margaret was almost...perfect.  One more treatment and she’d finally be beautiful, breathtakingly so, like her childhood friend, Diana.  No more being Diana’s “plain” friend - the one men ignored.  
After this, they’d want her.  After all this, in Margaret delusional mind, she'd achieve synchronicity.

“Hold still, Margaret. Almost done.” Dr. Frank said, making one last injection.  The miasma of nitro seeped eerily from the cryotank.

The needle’s contents crept through Margaret’s veins.  Laced with stem cells, the treatment promised to regenerate Margaret’s face to a youthful state.

Margaret mumbled.

“Don’t move. You’ll cause damage.” Dr. Frank clipped, blotting blood from her face.

Margaret’s mouth opened in pain. “Ahhhh.”

“Do not oscitate!”  Dr. Frank shouted.

Margaret panicked eyes glanced at his nurse.  Her worried expression mirrored Margaret’s. Not good.

Dr. Frank cursed, snatching more gauze.

Margaret felt her lips become uncomfortably plump.  Her forehead stretched far too much; underneath her tendons felt torn.  She hadn’t planned for this; the horrifying lacuna where everything went terribly wrong.  She wanted to scream.

Too late.

In the end, Margaret's beautification efforts were futile.

Truth be told, they were downright ugly.



That's it!  I'm adding this one to my Hallucinating Housewives #FF.  Fun stuff.  Looking forward to reading the others. :)

Mina B.

17 comments:

ali cross said...

Ha! That last line was PERFECT for the story! Great job Mina!

David Powers King said...

Karma can be awful, huh? Nice one. Loved your tension building and the unfortunate consequences.

Great job, Mina! :)

The Golden Eagle said...

Great last line to the story!

Jen said...

This is creepy and grotesque, two of my favourite things! It's hard to find too much sympathy for Margaret. Great job getting the challenge words in!

Mins is #3.

Ruth Hartman Berge said...

Wow! Nice and creepy and very topical!

I'm #44.

Cherie Colyer said...

Definitely creepy, but nicely done!

Stacy Henrie said...

This is awesome! Beauty that kills. :) Great job.

Pabkins said...

Nightmare! hey thats what vanity will do to you!

Pabkins @ Mission to Read

F.E. Sewell said...

Ooh. That was deliciously dark and so much fun to read. Great job!

Ron Smith said...

Great!

Looks to die for...

K.T. Hanna said...

Love this story! The price of beauty, or ugly in this case. Loved it, Mina.

Angela Orlowski-Peart said...

Creepy and dark - in a great way. I didn't expect the twist at the end. Yikes.

I'm # 157

raelynbarclay said...

The price of vanity...excellent. Great take on the challenge.

MISH said...

A topical and controversial subject ... and the last line was slamming !!
Thanks for popping in and leaving a comment on my blog !

Carrie Butler said...

Oo, Mina! I didn't realize you had a blog button. I'll add that to my scrolling blogroll. :)

Anyhoo, great work! I loved it. :)

Jessica Therrien said...

Very creepy :) I loved it. Excellent story Mina!

Mina Burrows said...

Thanks, everyone for commenting. Aside from the fun of writing flash fiction, I prefer interacting with my writer friends more. *hugs*