Saturday, September 10, 2011

Writer Campaign Flash Fiction Challenge

Well, writer campaigners.  I didn’t get my flash fiction piece done on time because frankly, I ran out of time.  Booooooooooo!  I know.  I know.  However, despite not being able to make it in time, I still wanted to support the campaign – which is why I’m posting now.  There were over 300 people that submitted their FF, so if your interested, start here and happy reading! 

 Deadly Whispers

The door swung open, nearly bursting its hinges.  I stared back at an empty threshold.

Confused, I went to investigate, but stopped when a vase near the door crashed onto the floor.

My head jerked to the doorway, but no one was there.


Another step and the coat rack thwacked across the entryway, knocking down a lamp and spilling my glass of Boudreaux over my sofa and coffee table.

Cursing the mess, I glanced at the door suspiciously.  Spidering tingles permeated through me, and I shuddered.  Despite no one being there, something still felt terribly wrong.

My cat then pounced onto the mess, licking hungrily at the puddled wine.

“No!” I said, but she uncharacteristically hissed.

I gasped. Only one person made her viciously hiss, and that was Miles. But there was no way it was him.

It couldn’t be.

My
gaze darted back to the door, only to hear a whisper in my other ear, “Hush.”


I jumped; my eyes frantically scanned the empty room.

A horrifying vibe assaulted me, followed by an ice-cold pressure squeezing my throat.

My eyes widened when an unmistakable voice spoke.

“Hello, sweetheart,” Mile’s ghost said. “Love me. Hate me. Kill me. You really are one fickle, bi-"



And then the door slammed shut.

The end.

If you're interested in a few other flash fictions I've written, click my Hallucinating Housewives ff series here.   Anyway, I’m off not to spend some time reading other writer’s FF.


Cheers,
Mina

14 comments:

Ron Smith said...

Fantastic, Mina! Loved it. Glad you still posted it.

WritingNut said...

Ooh, I loved it! You had me on the edge of my seat!

Kimberly said...

Ooh, this was really good. Love the ending!

Erin L. Schneider said...

You did an excellent job with this, Mina! I'm sorry you weren't able to make the cut off - but there are still 2 more challenges left!

Thanks for visiting / joining my blog! Hope to see you around the Banned Books hop, too!

REINHARDT! said...

Whoa! Really intense! I'm sad you didn't get it posted in time, but I'm glad you posted it nonetheless. Great job!

Nadja Notariani said...

Oh! This is fantastic, Mina! 'Spidering tingles...' - just wonderful word choice...and the ending, 'Love me. Hate me. Kill me. You...' - deliciously dark.
And yes, I am an historical romance lover! I'm not sure that my post was set in any time period in my mind, though. Many readers felt the vibe you did! Thank you for your kind words. Hope to see you again. ~ Nadja

Mina Burrows said...

@Ron - Thanks, Ron. Could have been much better. Damn! LOL.

@WritingNut - Thx, but I went over the 200 wd count. Drat!

@Kimberly - Thanks.

@Erin - Thx. I hope my work schedule isn't too demanding like it was last week. *sigh*

@Reinhardt - Thanks. Yeah, I tried. Wasn't gonna happen. I'm already sleep deprived as it is...

@Nadja - Thanks. I love dark love - probably too much. LOL. And I adore HS.

Looking forward to visiting you all soon. :)

ali cross said...

HAHHHHH!!!! That was awesome! If she killed him, she deserved to be haunted by him, right? This was scary good!

Mina Burrows said...

Aw thanks, Ali. I'm not quite the ninja, but I'm having fun trying. :)

Jessica Therrien said...

I loved this Mina! Great story...I was completely hooked. Thanks for visiting my blog :)

Jessica Therrien said...

Hey Mina! I’ve listed you as a recipient of the Versatile Blogger Award. You may have already recieved it, but if you haven't...Congrats! You can find the details here: http://jessica-therrien.blogspot.com/2011/09/im-feeling-love.html

S. L. Hennessy said...

Hi! I stubled across your blog today in the Ninja Writers Dojo (I'm a new member!) and loved it! Especially all your Joss Whedon references. I can tell your a fan - he's one of my all time favorite writers. Go Buffy!

Great flash fiction story by the way! I'm sorry you didn't get it in in time. It would have been a great contest piece! Mine's #262 (http://pensuasion.blogspot.com/)

P.S. My favorite Buffy villain was Spike (who, yes, became a non-villain but he was so GOOD when he was bad!).

Kristina Fugate said...

I really loved this piece! This ending is great!

Oh, and I've passed the Versatile Blogger award on to you! If you want to pick it up, info is here: http://kaykays-corner.blogspot.com/2011/09/im-versatile.html

Mina Burrows said...

@Jessica & Kristina - Thanks for my versatile blogger award. This is great. Thank you. I am working on a post for this one this week. Thanks again.

@S. L. Hennessy - Cool! Thanks for stopping by. I need to see if I can get my Ninja Writing Dojo-Mojo on. :)